Please tell me that you do and that you’d love to help me with something!
I’ve rewritten my query letter for the umpteenth time and was hoping to get a little feedback. If you have a minute (I know, I know it’s a Friday for the love of Pete!) would you read it and tell me if it sucks?
Thanks. Here it is:
Sam Oliveira can barely make through a day without gut-wrenching visions. Glimpsing natural disasters and terrorist attacks leaves him with a pounding migraine and his head in the toilet, but he accepts that no seventeen-year-old can prevent those things from happening.
When his latest nightmares reveal the death of his crush, Gabby Wilkins, at the hands of a faceless stalker, Sam knows he can’t wait and do nothing. Problem is, Sam’s only getting flashes — wild images of her being beaten, broken, submerged in water. If he could learn to control his precognition, he might be able to protect her.
The two people who can help Sam — and uncle with a murderous agenda and a drug lord who wants Sam’s gifts for his business — seem untenable options but time is slipping away and Sam is desperate.
Be honest. Be cruel. Pretend you’re Query Shark and chomp away. I’ll love you forever.